Journal One
The feedback given from my peers on my rough draft was very helpful. They bought to light header, grammatical, and paragraph errors. From the reviews, I discovered that I must first state and enhance my thesis statement. The topic sentences need to be clearly stated as well as divide my paragraphs. Grammar and punctuation needs to be fixed such as commas, indentations and proper use of spacing. Aribi001 commented that my essay was good but I had one or two mistakes. A space should be placed after a comma, before I continued a sentence in the second paragraph. She also commented that I need to correct a grammatical error from “it our responsibility” to “it’s our responsibility”.
Michael commented that I needed to identify and indent my paragraphs. He also identified my spacing a comma dilemma once again in my second paragraph. He suggested that I stay away from proper nouns and change “Our” to “Students” in the second paragraph. He also mentioned that I should not say like as much in as used in my last paragraph. These peer reviews helped me identify my errors before submitting it. I will correct these errors and make additional adjustments where need be.
I also helped my peers by reviewing their essays. As I reviewed nluce001’s essay, I discovered two grammatical errors. The first was to change fell to felt too fell in the second paragraph. My second suggestion was to re word a sentence only because it sounded like a run on sentence. Overall this peer review process was extremely helpful. It pointed out my errors and because of this I can make the proper corrections for my final draft.